Make it clear from the start that this is about film openings The paragraph on Troy is incomplete Examples need to be more directly linked to the point you’re making. For example, you talk about Key Cast Names and then use Dumb and Dumber as an example, but the picture doesn’t have any cast names on it. A few videos would be ideal. Film names start with Capital Letters! What about establishing shots? Establishing genre?
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Make it clear from the start that this is about film openings
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Examples need to be more directly linked to the point you’re making. For example, you talk about Key Cast Names and then use Dumb and Dumber as an example, but the picture doesn’t have any cast names on it.
A few videos would be ideal.
Film names start with Capital Letters!
What about establishing shots?
Establishing genre?
Address the above to reach the target you should be aiming for
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